假如你是李華，你有一個美國的朋友Tom將要來你們學(xué)校參加交換生活動。請你根據(jù)以下提示，用英語介紹一下你的好朋友張明。
寫作要點：
1. How old is he? When is his birthday?
2. What’s his favorite subject? Why does he like it?
3. When does he have his favorite subject?
4. What can he do? What is he good at?
要求：
1. 條理清楚；行文連貫，可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮；
2. 不得出現(xiàn)真實的人名、校名、班級等相關(guān)信息；
3. 開頭已給出，詞數(shù)不少于60。
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Hello，Tom. I\'m Li Hua. I have a good friend. He is a thirteen-year-old boy like you. His birthday is on January1st. Next Sunday is his birthday. I want to go his home and have a party with him. Do you want to go with me! It\'s really interesting.
His favorite subject is English. He thinks it’s useful and fun. You can talk with him in English. He has English classes on Monday and Friday . His English teacher, Mrs. Xiong is great kind. She is very good with students. So all of his classmates like Mrs. Xiong very much. She is very good at English.
He is very good at P.E. He can play basketball and baseball very well. He only has a P.E. class every week. It\'s on Thursday. He also does well in music. He can sing lots of songs. He can play the drums well. He will play the drums next month. Because our school music festival is next month. Can you come then? I think you will be happy to see those music shows.
Do you know who he is? Yes, he is my best friend, Zhang Ming. He is friendly and fun. I think you will make friends with him. Who\'s your best friend ? Please write to me soon!
老師評語：文章條理清晰，要點齊全，語句流暢，句式豐富，從個人基本信息到文化學(xué)習(xí)再到文體活動。開頭設(shè)置懸念，最后回答，并且引用了一些連詞，使文章過渡自然。
張晨陽
Hello. Tom. I\'m Li Hua. I have a good friend. His name is Zhang Ming. He is thirteen. His birthday is on April 9th.
What\'s his favourite subject? His favourite subject is math. Why? Because he thinks it’s useful and interesting. He has math on Monday, Tuesday, Thursday and Friday.
What can he do? He can play the guitar. And he is good at playing the guitar. What does he do after school? He either plays baseball or plays the guitar after school.
This is my good friend. Do you want to be his friend? I’m looking forward to hearing from you .
老師評語: 語言簡潔明了，直接闡述要點，文章結(jié)構(gòu)清晰，能夠?qū)⒄n堂上所學(xué)知識點準(zhǔn)確地用于描寫身邊的朋友，學(xué)用結(jié)合，學(xué)以致用，老師相信日積月累你的英語水平一定會越來越好！
徐靜秋
Hello,Tom I’m Li Hua. I have a good friend, Zhang Ming. He is twelve. I am one year older than him. His birthday is in August and my birthday is in August, too.
Math is his favourite subject, because he thinks it is interesting, but I think it is difficult for me. Zhang Ming and I are in the same school. He has math on Monday, Tuesday, Wednesday and Friday. He doesn’t like history because he thinks it is boring.
Zhang Ming likes P.E. too. Because he thinks exercise is good for his health,he can play football,basketball,volleyball and tennis.He is good at sports, but my P.E. is not very good, so he often helps me with my English. We always play together.
This is my good friend. What about you? Who is your good friend,Tom?
老師評語：本篇英語作文，按照寫作的要求介紹了自己的朋友，短文結(jié)構(gòu)合理，內(nèi)容豐富，從喜歡的科目，喜歡的運動兩個方面分別進行了介紹，句式較為豐富，采用了適當(dāng)?shù)年P(guān)聯(lián)詞，使短文讀起來流暢，自然。
陳玥婷
Hello,Tom I’m Li Hua, I have a good friend, his name is Zhang Ming. He is 13 years old. His birthday is on March 27th. He likes English best, because he thinks it’s easy for him. He always helps me with English. He has English classes from Monday to Wednesday. He usually tells me: practice makes perfect. If you want to improve your English,you should read English for half an hour every morning.
He also does well in swimming. He often goes to swim with his brother. He thinks it is relaxing.
This is my friend. Please remember: his name is Zhang Ming.
王梓茜
Hello, Tom. I’m Li Hua. I have a good friend. His name is Zhang Ming. He is a good boy. He is twelve years old. His birthday is on December 1st. He is older than me.
His favorite subject is history. He thinks history is very useful and interesting. And he likes his history teacher very much. He has history classes from Monday to Friday. He can also tell stories but he wants to join the art club. Do you know why? Because he is good at drawing. After class, he usually plays basketball with his classmates. He thinks doing exercise every day is good for health.
Zhang Ming is a helpful student. He can speak English very well, so he always helps me with my English. Do you want to make friends with him?
老師評語：該篇作文結(jié)構(gòu)完整，要點清晰，有適當(dāng)?shù)耐卣?。從姓名，年齡及愛好等方面描述了你的好朋友，也很好的運用了之前我們講過的話題中的句型，希望接下來你能繼續(xù)積累好詞好句，并加以運用。
李若宣
Hello, Tom! I\'m Li Hua. I have a good friend. His first name is Ming and his last name is Zhang. He is twelve years old. Let me tell you something about him now.
His birthday is on January 1st. His favorite subject is P.E. Because he thinks it\'s easy and fun. We usually play basketball in P.E. class. It is one of his favorite sports. He likes Kobe too. And he wants to be a basketball player like him. He can play the guitar well. He always plays the guitar at home on weekends. He also has good habits. He exercises every day and goes to bed early. And he likes eating vegetables and fruit.They are healthy. He never eats ice- cream after dinner, so he has a healthy life.
Welcome to our school! You can make friends
with Zhang Ming. He is friendly and nice! We all like him very much.
老師評語：文章結(jié)構(gòu)清晰，行文連貫。讓我們非常詳細(xì)地了解了你的朋友。過渡自然，句式豐富！
劉欣怡
Hello,Tom! I\'m Li Hua. I have a good friend. His name is Zhang Ming.
He is 13 years old. His birthday is on January 24th. I am a little shy but he is an outgoing boy. So his favorite subject is P.E. He thinks it\'s relaxing. But you know, I don\'t like P.E.We have P.E. on Tuesday,Wednesday and Friday. So Zhang Ming always enjoys these three days. He spends most of time playing sports with his classmates.
He also can do many things like playing the chess, drawing some pictures and singing. And he is very good at speaking English. So I think you will be happy to make friends with him.
Welcome to our school and join us!
老師評語：你有一位和你截然不同的朋友，你對朋友的觀察細(xì)致入微。全文條理清晰，銜接自然，可見功底深厚！
吳予宸
Hello, Tom. I’m Li Hua. I have a good friend. His name is Zhang Ming. He is twelve. His birthday is on September 12th.
His favorite subject is P.E.. Because he thinks it is easy and interesting. The P.E. class is on Monday, Wednesday and Friday. He also can play the violin. But he is good at playing the piano. He thinks it is easy and relaxing. I don’t think so.
He has a good habit. He always does morning exercises after breakfast. He doesn’t like eating ice-cream. Because he thinks it is not good for him. He never eats ice-cream. He doesn’t want to be fat. I think he is a good boy. Do you want to see him?
老師評語：該篇作文書寫漂亮，結(jié)構(gòu)完整，重點明確，表達簡潔合理。很好的運用了課內(nèi)句型去表達想法和感受，從喜好，習(xí)慣等方面很細(xì)致地描述了好朋友，并且適當(dāng)拓展了句型。個別表達如果注意語言的準(zhǔn)確性就更棒了！
余林霏
His name is Zhang Ming and he is a friendly boy.He is 14 years old. Oh!He is older than us. He\'s very tall.
We have 8 classes from Monday to Friday. Zhang Ming is very clever and his favourite subject is English. He often speaks English with me! Do you know why he likes it？I think it is easy and interesting for him but I don\'t like English.
The class finishes at 5:00pm. And after that, he often plays basketball with classmates on the playground. He plays basketball very well. He often teaches me how to play basketball. He wants to be a basketball star!
Oh! His birthday is on January 30th. His birthday is next week . He asks his good friends to come to his birthday party.
This is my good friend.
老師評語：該篇文章結(jié)構(gòu)完整，要點齊全，有適當(dāng)?shù)耐卣?，能綜合使用各個話題中的句型，做到了學(xué)以致用。但是如果結(jié)尾句能適當(dāng)表達個人對好朋友的評價就更好了。
徐佳鑫
Hello, Tom, I’m Li Hua . I have a good friend. His name is Zhang Ming. He is 12 years old. His birthday is on June 1st. It’s Children’s day.
He is in Beijing with his parents now. He doesn’t have brothers or sisters. He is a student in Xinhua Middle School. And he is in Class 1, Grade 7. English is his favorite subject. Because he thinks it is easy and interesting. He has English from Monday to Friday. And he can speak English very well.
After class, he always plays basketball games with us. Of all sports, he likes basketball best. He says it is relaxing for him. And he also plays the piano in the evening . He is good at it. It can also make him excited. He loves it.
He is great. Do you want to make friends with him? Please call him at 759-8191. I think you can be his good friend.
老師評語:該篇文章不僅完整表達了各個要點，還對所學(xué)知識點進行了相應(yīng)的拓展，最后有個人感受，使文章更加完整了。這篇文章體現(xiàn)了你不錯的綜合語言運用能力，希望你繼續(xù)積累好詞好句，讓語言更加豐富。
吳泓萱
My friend \' s name is Zhang Ming . He is thirteen years old , his
birthday is on March 8th. Zhang Ming \' s favorite subject is math , he thinks it \' s useful and easy to learn . I think so , too. And we have math classes on Monday , Tuesday , Thursday and Friday .Oh , I forget , he can also play basketball , he plays it well and he gets a lot of medals at school . We are very proud of him , he is so great !
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